misstified
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Steggie looked up to see a great pair of open jaws descending onto him. Reply #1. Nov 06 17, 3:06 PM |
ElusiveDream
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The name I've chosen for the main character is Travion, but I'm not sure if I should start the story with him being a hatchling or if he should already be fully grown. The only book I've read that's similar is 'Raptor Red' by Robert Bakker. In this story, the main character is fully-grown but there are flashbacks to when she was a hatchling. Reply #2. Nov 10 17, 6:53 PM |
misstified
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If you're covering a year in the character's life, as your first post says, then starting with him full-grown sounds better. Reply #3. Nov 11 17, 4:01 PM |
ElusiveDream
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Here are the first two opening paragraphs. Chapter 1 is called 'Allosaur Attack!' The sun shines warm and bright in the late Jurassic sky. Travion looks up to see a great pair of open jaws descending upon him. His tail, armed with two pairs of sharp spikes, swings dangerously from side to side. The hungry Allosaur pauses for a moment, then lunges forward. Whack! The Allosaur stumbles backwards, her leg bleeding from a deep cut. She cautiously lowers her foot to the ground, testing her injured limb to see if it will take her weight. For the moment, it does. Reply #4. Nov 27 17, 12:00 AM |
misstified
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Yes, that sounds interesting. I'd be willing to read more of a story with this beginning. Reply #5. Nov 27 17, 3:13 PM |
wmd
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"Damn, where DID I leave my pants?" Reply #6. Nov 27 17, 5:43 PM |
SeaBreeze12
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Mother died yesterday. (Albert Camus) Reply #7. Sep 27 20, 7:05 AM |
SeaBreeze12
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I apologize for my post above. I usually read the instructions, but I messed up this time. Reply #8. Sep 27 20, 7:06 AM |
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