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Subject: Opening lines to grab reader's attention

Posted by: ElusiveDream
Date: Oct 27 17

Whenever I get a new idea for a story, I have to start writing it. Can anyone help me with some ideas for an opening line for my new story that will grab the reader's attention and make them want to keep reading? The story will be titled 'Kimmeridgian' because it's set in North America during the Kimmeridgian stage of the Late Jurassic period. The story follows a year in the life of one of my favourite dinosaurs, Stegosaurus.

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Steggie looked up to see a great pair of open jaws descending onto him.

Reply #1. Nov 06 17, 3:06 PM
ElusiveDream
The name I've chosen for the main character is Travion, but I'm not sure if I should start the story with him being a hatchling or if he should already be fully grown. The only book I've read that's similar is 'Raptor Red' by Robert Bakker. In this story, the main character is fully-grown but there are flashbacks to when she was a hatchling.

Reply #2. Nov 10 17, 6:53 PM
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If you're covering a year in the character's life, as your first post says, then starting with him full-grown sounds better.

Reply #3. Nov 11 17, 4:01 PM
ElusiveDream
Here are the first two opening paragraphs. Chapter 1 is called 'Allosaur Attack!'



The sun shines warm and bright in the late Jurassic sky. Travion looks up to see a great pair of open jaws descending upon him. His tail, armed with two pairs of sharp spikes, swings dangerously from side to side. The hungry Allosaur pauses for a moment, then lunges forward.

Whack! The Allosaur stumbles backwards, her leg bleeding from a deep cut. She cautiously lowers her foot to the ground, testing her injured limb to see if it will take her weight. For the moment, it does.





Reply #4. Nov 27 17, 12:00 AM
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Yes, that sounds interesting. I'd be willing to read more of a story with this beginning.

Reply #5. Nov 27 17, 3:13 PM
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"Damn, where DID I leave my pants?"

Reply #6. Nov 27 17, 5:43 PM
SeaBreeze12
Mother died yesterday. (Albert Camus)

Reply #7. Sep 27 20, 7:05 AM
SeaBreeze12
I apologize for my post above. I usually read the instructions, but I messed up this time.

Reply #8. Sep 27 20, 7:06 AM


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